Cartographer's Craft
By copperbadge
Followup:
The mango (Mangifera spp.; Hindi: आम; plural mangos or mangoes) is a genus of about 35 species of tropical fruiting trees in the flowering plant family Anacardiaceae, native to India and
Southeast Asia, of which the Indian Mango M. indica is by far the most important commercially.
Do mangoes actually grow in England?
It is very much a tropical fruit, and while I know ENgland has a milder climate tha would be expected, because of the Gulf Stream, I find it hard to believe that fruit that can't endure the cold of
even a Central Florida winter would be growable, outside of a hothouse, in England.
That might be a problem to justify, unless you just want to write it off as "magic".
Story looks good so far. Just two things I noticed so far: in chapter 1 you might want to make the time jump between Sirius' point of view and Harry's a bit more obvious. I was quite confused at
first till I figured out that the Harry-part happened before the ending of the Sirius-part.
And in this chapter (9), the whole chapter is rather hard to read as the whole text is centered (which I'm sure is accident).
Have you seen the musical Wicked?
if you have, email me at athenalupin@gmail.com